[NIFL-ESL:8388] Re: Grammar question

From: Ken Todd (kentodd@UDel.Edu)
Date: Thu Dec 12 2002 - 17:47:12 EST


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I would say it is not the student who is mistaken, but the program. I
would not be averse to defending the claim that "I water ski" is
sentence with a verb.
Although if the stydetn's goal is to learn to write for graduate school,
I would recommend four short sentences instaed of one ungainly one.
Lorraine Dutton wrote:
> 
> Hi Barbara,
> 
> Aha--you got it! :)
> 
> Even though it appears that all three are gerunds, they aren't. Placing the
> nouns "snow" and "water" before "skiing" changes their grammatical role.
> Both my student and I thought the sentence looked fine as it was, so that's
> why I had to dig deeper when the program said it was wrong. I'm never
> content to tell a student something is wrong; I always want to tell them
> why it's wrong and help them to find a solution. In order to make this
> sentence parallel, you would need to add a gerund before the nouns "snow
> skiing" and "water skiing." And doing so makes the sentence rather awkward.
> As Anna said, the best way would be to rewrite the sentence completely and
> to express the ideas in a different way.
> 
> Lorraine
> 
> At 11:49 AM 12/12/02 -0500, you wrote:
> >Lorraine:  In my opinion, that sentence DOES have correct parallelism,
> >because "enjoy" takes verbs in the gerund form, and you have those forms in
> >each object of the sentence: snow skiing, going, and water skiing.  It's
> >just that the student doesn't "see" it that way.  If you wanted each object
> >to "look" the same, you might try: enjoy going snow skiing, going to
> >baseball games, and going water skiing.  However, I feel that the original
> >sentence would be the more common way to express the idea.
> >Barbara Dorsett, ESOL Dept. Head
> >Dover Adult Learning Center
> >Dover, NH
> >----- Original Message -----
> >From: Lorraine Dutton
> >To: Multiple recipients of list
> >Sent: Thursday, December 12, 2002 11:15 AM
> >Subject: [NIFL-ESL:8372] Grammar question
> >
> >
> >Hi all!
> >
> >I have a student who is working on parallel structure, and one of the
> >sentences she encountered in her lesson is as follows:
> >
> >The Bensons enjoy snow skiing in the winter, going to baseball games in the
> >spring, and water skiing in the summer.
> >
> >This sentence has faulty parallelism because "going to baseball games" is a
> >different structure from the other two elements in the sentence. My question
> >is, how could you fix this sentence and still keep the original idea intact?
> >I'm drawing a blank....
> >
> >Let me know your ideas!
> >
> >Lorraine Dutton
> >lad-oh@etop.org



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